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TheTigerPaws

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Mystoc

power is weak it doesnt help with chase and requires you too hit people which means u have to catch them basicly an m1 kill who cant even use their power

first perk insanely OP wraith can cloak and end chases right away, even if this didnt exist this just a better play with ur food

next two perks are just weak

hidining hook aura for 16 sec for 1 person

and sloppy butcher but only if u hook someone

TheTigerPaws

Thank you for your comments, I’ll do some editing then.

WickedMilk03

@TheTigerPaws said:

I had a fun idea for a killer for a while. I’m slightly but afraid it might be considered to close to The Plague, lore-wise, but what do you guys think?

Map: City of Gold (Backwater Swamp)

If you follow the rivers in the swamp, you’ll soon find a city made of gold. Plucked from the Jaguar’s mind and planted in Backwater Swamp, City of Gold represented his original home. The city’s center shows a fine marketplace, many laid out rugs and tents showing fine goods. A beautiful bathhouse connects to many canals. Up ahead, the temple of Tezcatlicopa, and to honor the eternal god of night, a huge stairway that leads to the sacrificial alter. While it’s true name was long forgotten, there is a certain unsettling beauty to this place.

Killer: The Jaguar 

Name: Necalli

Aliases: Cuāuhocēlōtl

Gender: Male 

Nationality: Aztec 

Realm: Backwater Swamp (City of Gold) 

Power: Ritual of Tezcatlipoca

Weapon: Macuahuitl 

Speed: 4.6/115 

Terror Radius: 32 Meters 

Height: Tall

 

Appearance: The Jaguar is muscular with deeply tanned skin. He wears a jaguar pelt around his legs, an obsidian knife attached to his hip, and a white loincloth. He wears jaguar fur around his shins and wrists and wears leather sandals. His headdress is made from a jaguar head, his face coming out of the jaguar’s mouth, with red and black feathers attach to the head. His chest and stomach is exposed, showing off his tattoos along his body. His left hand is not of flesh, but rather of obsidian. The top half of his face is has war paint over his eyes, but the bottom half of his face shows no skin or muscles, showing instead a skeletal jawbone and teeth. 

Background 

Necalli was born within the Golden City, and began training when only a mere child. Necalli soon proved himself strong, navigating the toughest of streams, disarming many of the other trainees, outrunning and taking down multiple obstacles and showing off as a gifted hunter and sportsman. Soon Necalli and many other young men were called into battle, an army threatening to take the city. Necalli suited up, only within a few scraps of war cloths and a spear, and took on the the battle. Within the blood and violence, Necalli managed to take down an enemy soldier, and instead of killing him, Necalli knew what must be done and capture the man instead. The priests and the commanders were impressed with Necalli’s first capture, allowing the man to take part of the ceremony. Necalli watched as the priest slit open the capture soldier’s chest, the man screaming in pain as the priest forced his hand into the wound and soon ripping out hos heart, killing the soldier. The sacrifice to the gods was complete. Necalli soon learned that he had moved up the ranks of their army because of his capture, he was given an undecorated obsidian-edged club, a shield, two distinctive capes and a bright red loincloth. When the next battle came, Necalli was ready. Soon one capture became two, then three and then four, and the numbers were all but a blur to the young man. For his work, Necalli has moved up to the high rank of Cuauhocelotl; the Eagle warriors and the Jaguar Warriors. Necalli looked at the two sub armies and deciding to join the Jaguar warriors, those who honor Tezcatlipoca, The Jaguar god of darkness, magic, and war. He was given his Jaguar uniform, many weapons, the tattoos and marking of his status, his own land, personal concubines, and became a commander in the army. Life was glorious for the warrior, but it soon came to an end. The new threat came across from a different land. Men with pale skin and odd weapons. The army of the Golden City ready themselves, Necalli in front with the other commanders. The battle was long and gruesome. Many warrior losing their lives, but not without taking as many of the enemy as they could. Necalli fought with everything he had in him, killing and dragging captive enemies away. Then soon Necalli got too close to was opponent, with his odd weapon pointed at the Aztec. A loud boom was heard and Necalli collapses to the ground, blood dripping and flesh hanging out from his face. But by some miracle, Necalli survived the attack, his face horribly disfigured. The golden city’s army won the battle, but loss so many warriors. The commanders knew the new threat will come again soon. Necalli laid within the healer’s hall, feeling defeated as the high priest came forward. He offered Necalli a way to defend the city from the new threat. A ritual that can call on the true power of Tezcatlipoca. A ritual that can give Necalli power and strength. Necalli accepted without a second thought. The priest took Necalli to the sacred alter and laid him down. He gave Necalli a heart, the heart of a jaguar and told him to consume it. Necalli wasted no time, tearing his teeth into the organ as the priest took out a small bowl of blood and paint them along Necalli’s tattoos, before finally taking out a obsidian knife and asking Necalli if he still wanted to do this. Necalli nodded, determined to take on what comes next for his city. Without another word, the priest took the knife and stab into Necalli’s left wrist, breaking the bone before tearing into the rest of the flesh. Necalli grit his teeth, pain hitting his brain as a scream was held in his throat. When his hand was completely severed, the priest took it and placed it into the bowl of blood. He chanted and pleaded to the Gods as Necalli squirmed in pain, his stubbed arm oozing blood as he struggle for consciousness. When the priest finally ended the chant and set fire to the bowl’s contents, Necalli had passed out. The fire consume the hand and blood, burning it to ashes. All around the sky turned black, as Necalli’s body begin to squirm and soon thrash. Blood poured from his disfigured mouth and the knife by the priest’s side, to his shock, begin to melt, the obsidian colored liquid moved around Necalli’s body and to his missing hand. When it made contact, Necalli’s eyes opened. 

The Spaniards came again to the city of gold, just as predicted, but no history is told of it. Why? Because they all died before being able to tell about it. The city became known as impenetrable. From rival cities to foreign enemies, no one was able to touch the City of Gold. It grew into an Legend of an untouched city, no one being able to find it and come back to tell the tale. But even then, legends do, in the end, are uncovered. The Coty was finally found, it had been defeated and ransacked. Skeletal remains tell of some of the carnage, but the real story told of the city’s protector, a patron of some kind. Images of this protector slaughtering hundreds of enemies, mowing them down one by one. Until one night, a deep fog overcame the city and the protector vanished. It didn’t take long for the city itself to fall after that. The legend of the lost City of Gold was uncovered, but in the end, it only brought up more questions. 

Weapon: Macuahuitl. A flat wooden club with skull designs and Nahuatl language carved on to it. Along the edge of the club, obsidian blades are attach around it. The Jaguar lets the blood drip off his weapon and on to his obsidian hand. 

Power: Ritual of Tezcatlipoca

After The Jaguar hits a survivor, he lift his weapon up and lets the blood drip on to his obsidian hand. The blood absorbs into his arm and this fills up a blood gauge that allows The Jaguar to use his ability. His ability, throws darkness on to the survivor’s vision, decreasing luck, aura reading capabilities, harder skill checks, and in general harder to see the map. He can use his power in different tiers depending on how much blood he had saved up, but using his power reduces

 the blood he had collected. 

Tier 1: The Jaguar is able to cast darkness on a single survivor within line of sight, making it hard for them to see on their screen and reduces their luck. Lasts for a minute. 

Tier 2: The Jaguar pushes his darkness into his terror radius. Any survivor within his terror radius will have their sight darkened, their luck reduced, and disrupting aura reading capabilities as well. Lasts for a minute.

Tier 3: The Jaguar spreads his darkness across the whole map, effecting all survivors, darkening their vision, reducing luck, and disrupt aura reading capabilities. Lasts for a minute.

Perks: For the Gods, Chosen Tribute, Hunger for Blood 

For the Gods: After chasing a survivor and letting them escape 3/2/1 times, this perk activates. When chasing a survivor again, the survivor will become Exposed. If you down the Exposed survivor, the perk will be placed on a cooldown. If the survivor escapes, the Exposed status will be removed and the perk will be set on a cooldown. Has a 45 second cooldown. 

Chosen Tribute: You become obsessed with one survivor. Hooking your obsession will hide your obsession’s aura for 6/12/18 seconds. After your obsession is sacrificed, you gain a 20% increase of bloodpoints in the Sacrifice category.  

Hunger for Blood: After hooking a survivor, you are able to inflict the Hemorrhage status on the next healthy survivor you hit. They suffer from it for 30/45/60 seconds. 

Mori Killing: The Jaguar walks up to the survivor, grabbing them by the neck, and slamming them on their back, he takes the knife from his hip and stabs into their torso, under their rib cage, dragging it open. He then shoves his hand into the cut reaches up and tears out the survivor’s heart. He raises the heart up high before squeezing it, letting the blood pour on himself. 

Survivor: Pedro Silva

Gender: Male 

Role: Gentle Strongman 

Nationality/Ethnicity: Afro-Brazilian

Appearance: He’s a powerlifter, muscular and huge. He has dark brown skin, coffee brown eyes, dark brown hair in long dreads and a scruffy short black beard with some grey. He wears a grey compression pants, grey tank top, black weightlifting shoes, and black wrist sweatbands. 

Backstory: Pedro Silva grew up with a house full of boys. He was forced to learn to be tough. Never cry. Never show emotional invulnerability. Only masculine things. This was just how things were in his household. Him and his brothers were encouraged to rough house, to the point where almost every week requires a trip to the hospital. Aron has always been pretty strong. But when he began to mature is when his strength really blossomed. He took on wrestling in school and was constantly at the gym. His father pushed him harder and harder, both physically and mentally to be a real man. Pedro was depressed. He hated feeling like he was never “man” enough. An ultimate form of masculinity his father has created that is completely unreachable. He did enjoying lifting weight, helping him ignore the pressure of his family. He grew physically stronger every day. His coach joked about how he should train for the olympics for powerlifting. Though a joke, Pedro held on to that idea after he had finished school and moved out of home. After moving out by himself for a few years, he decided to take in his old coach’s suggestion and began to train for the Olympics. The process took years, but he went through the steps, and was readying himself both mentally and physically. And it was hard, so hard. Days came where he was not able to push himself any farther. He didn’t know how to express his frustrations other than being angry and throwing things. The trainers he had hired had each quit, not wanting to be involved in Pedro’s rampages. Finally one coach came into his life and surprised him. A woman named Carmen. She was an Olympic weight lifting herself and began to train him. Although wary, he agreed and then came the day he had another temper tantrum. Carmen though was not having it and shut him down quickly. She then managed to convince him to go see a therapist and both the therapist and her got Pedro to take a break from training and do things he would not be allowed to do in his old family home. He started his own small garden. He painted pictures. He watched sad movies and let himself cried. He adopted a tiny kitten. With the therapy session, Pedro learn how to better express him emotions without violence and in general, be happier. The weight the family put on him, was let off and he felt he can breathe again. Eventually he returned to his weightlifting training and it became easier. He focused on discipline and become strong not only physically, but mentally. One night after work he decided to drop by the gym and get in a couple of hours in. Finding the place closed, he turned to leave, only to hear a click and the door open. Despite better judgement, he decided to walk in and close the door behind him. That was the last anyone heard from Pedro Silva. 

Perks: Herculean, Better Yourself Discipline.

Herculean: Your strength comes in handy. When you successfully stun a killer with a pallet, they are stun for 1/2/3 seconds longer, however, there is a 50% chance the pallet will break on impact. 

Better Yourself: You work hard, not to make yourself stronger, but to better yourself. Cleans Totems 15% faster. Leave no scratch marks for 5/8/11 seconds. 

Discipline: Pain is only an obstacle. You start the trial with 1/2/3 Tokens. When you protect another survivor by taking a hit from the killer, you will instead gain the Broken Status and use up a token. After 33 seconds, you’ll be healed instantly to the Healthy Stage.

I hope you guys liked Gift of Blood and please tell me what you guys think! Lots of muscular guys in this one haha.

Disipline is a super cool perk.

Better yourself is OP

Herculean has too great of a chance to get yourself killed.

Hunger for blood seems good but isnt that just a weaker sloppy or no? maybe just inflict broken for 45 seconds instead...

Chosen tribute is useless but maybe I am misinterpreting it

For the Gods should have a requirement in which they have to be outside of a 32 meter radius of the killer for it to activate bc you could easily abuse it.

WickedMilk03

The ability doesnt seem too strong. Maybe he could do a roar that would stun survivors near him for a sec in fear and then their breaths could be heard louder (as in fear) He should have a sprint thing too where he could get around super quick but couldnt attack off of it and canceling would have a 5sec stun but that timer would decrease based off of the amount of blood therefore the more time in match, he could use it eventually to get kills as in: sprinting behind someone, canceling and hitting. That would be map pressure...

TheTigerPaws

Working on some edits, but imma keep his darkness ability, just try to buff it first.

TheTigerPaws

Edit posted.

TheTigerPaws

Bumping up

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